Introduction- Thesis Statement: As we all know everybody has some characteristics that are hidden, or we can say that people who are close to us know these characteristics. These are the things that we abstain to tell even ourselves, or that we don’t show. Let's discover me...
Body Paragraph #1:
Topic Sentence: The thing that makes me afraid most is being lonely and having no friend.
A.I can’t share my feelings and thoughts when I don’t have any friend around me.
B.If I don’t have close friends and can’t talk to anybody, this situation makes me irritated and I feel depressed.
C.This situation generally occurs when we go to another city because of my father’s occupation.
D.I do sports if I don’t have any friend to talk or share my feelings and thoughts.
Body Paragraph #2:
Topic Sentence: Even if I have a huge body I sometimes can be too much sensitive.
A.This happens when lots of things come over me.
B.Although I don’t believe much in zodiac, this may result from my astrological sign, cancer.
C.I listen to music that expresses my feelings when I’m sensetive.
D.I keep out from tense atmosphere since I can give harm to people around me.
Body Paragraph #3:
Topic Sentence: I like being alone if I have a problem, or sad about something.
A.I generally go out and walk when something like that occurs.
B.I listen to music that goes with my mood.
Conclusion: It is better for you to approach me carefully when I’m in a bad mood and you can know me better if you spend time with me.
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Sorry for the late comment. First of all, you should have a clear thesis statement; but I couldn't find the thesis statement. Moreover, it is not appropriate to write "let's discover me" in an essay. And finally, try to mention each topic in your thesis statement. Then you can write your essay.
YanıtlaSilhi samet, I like your essay but your thesis statement and topic sentences in terms of the fact that they are not clear in the proper sense but your essay is a good job...
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